Spaanse mosselen

Hey LC!First of all, I'm sorry for the delayed reopsnse! I hope your move went well!Second of all, thank you for posting this! This poem is so emotional, with a nice flow that seems to be part of your work in general.OK on to the nuts and bolts. ;-)You ask about this line in particular:I didn’t think i would ever find someonewho would want to get to know me againIf you want to go metaphorical, you need to see what metaphors are carrying through the rest of the poem so as to be cohesive. You've got the soup can thing going on, the BOX thing, to be more accurate.So, something likeI thought no one elsewould crawl into my boxSomething like that. That way you also have the sex thing in there too, because this poem is definitely about sex as much as it is about pondering the ways in which sex and love and relationships do, should, and could go together (or not).About other things:THIS I LOVE:i didn’t know it was possibleto miss someone you don’t knowAlthough I might say I don't know instead of you don't know. Other comments, I guess are my usual tighten up sorts of things. Like this passage:cos last time i checkedcurling up beside someonenight after nightis called something elsesomething that rhymes with…girlfriendCould be something like this:last i checkedcurling up with the same bodynight after nightisn't datingThat sucks, but you know what I mean. To me, poems are most powerful when all the unnecessary language is stripped away, especially because then there is more room for the necessary language. ;-)Anyway, THANK YOU for sending more of your work. I love to read it and again, am sorry for this delayed reopsnse!Miriam

We zijn vandaag zondag 18 september maar ook de laatste zondag van dit kwakkelende zomerseizoen.Hopelijk hebben onze blogvrienden terug een onvergetelijke blogmeeting meegemaakt met heel veel leute en plezier.Ik wens Jullie ALLEN,sommigen wellicht nog in dromenland of aan het wakker worden en onze vroege vogels een heerlijke en zalige zondagnamiddag toe met vele lieve en hartelijke groetjes vanwege Jos.

Die selder, ui en prei tot daar toe maar waarom perse SPAANSE mosselen?

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